blackfrost of frostclan.

name= blackfrost
clan= frostclan
age/gender= she-cat, 12 moons
rank= newly made warrior
appearance= jet black, with white paws, lean but has a lot of muscle, very strong and fast, large  for her age
parents=  mother= clover, a rough/ father= a rough named slash
siblings= flame( deseced) raven( is lost has no idea where she went) and dust( dececed)

past life= was abused as a kite, flame and dust where killed at berth, raven and black were spared because they showed "potential ." later when black was about five moons old she heard her mother and father talking about killing raven, so she told raven to "run, run and never come back it for your own good" the  next day they found out that she told her about their plans, they tried to end me, but she got away. she looked and looked for raven, but she could never find her. later on she found frostclan, she observed them for a while then she  showed herself and asked if she could join the clan, they agreed. she had a great mentor, and a even greater clan, she would die for her clan.

behavior= headstrong, believes in what's right. always sticks to what she believes in even if its a mouse brain thing to believe in. she does not like to be looked after, and Is very independent. very ceriose, and does not take orders from anyone other then the leader, though she will learn to  lesson to the other warriors
fighting.. 9/10
hunting.. 5/10
swimming 7/10
  climbing.... 5/10
running 9/10
tracking.. 8/10
sneaking 9/10
ambushing 5/10

She's very good, but could you fix your grammar? Who is Kite? And what is "petintle"? She also needs more weaknesses, lots of her skills are above 5, she needs lower stuff. Please look at the links provided on your first audition.

is this better?

She still needs lower skills, and fighting and hunting can't both be excellent, maybe fighting is a 9 but hunting is say, a 4? And can you rewrite the history in third person? It is easier that way.

is THIS better

Yes, it's great!

Welcome to WarriorClan, and I can't wait to RP with little Blackfrost. Might I say she is very cute, and we're glad you've stuck around even if the rules for auditions might seem a little intimidating.