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Redfeather of Fireclan
.: Redfeather :.
"Even though I cannot fly, I sometimes feel like I can"
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b a s i c s
name ; Redfeather
age ; 36 moons
gender ; she-cat
clan ; Fireclan
rank ; Queen
description ; A beautiful sandy coloured she-cat with red Mackeral tabby stripes. A white paw and light blue eye. Her fur is not that long or short. She has permanent folded over ears.
skills ; out of ten Stamina: 4
Speed: 7
Climbing: 4
Swimming: 4
Strength: 5
Memory: 4
Hunting: 5
Fighting: 6
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b e h i n d t h e d cat
personality ; She's kind hearted, sweet, and never gets into fights. She can always rip apart her kits' fights if they have any, and she always tells them to smile. She is protective, ready to protect anyone she loves, even if they are her enemies from her clan. She deeply loves her kits. She tends to spoil those she loves. Sometimes she does not think before she speaks, annoying other cats.
history ; Redfeather was born as a normal kit. She was named after one of her uncles who had fought brilliantly in a battle and her parents hoped that she would rise up to the name. She was bullied when she was a kit, cause they knew she wouldn't fight back. When she was an apprentice, she trained as hard as he could, until she found out she was pregnant with her mentor's kits. She tried to hide it, but her warrior ceremony was when she gave birth to one beautiful kit. She was named Ratkit. Eventually they had their second and third litter.
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r o m a n t i c s
crush ;
mate ; Darkclaw (Dead)
kits ; Blackpaw, Rattail, Gorsekit and Flintkit
kin ; Darkclaw ~ Mate ~ Dead ~ Killed by warrior of Brightclan
Rowantail ~ Cousin ~ Alive ~ Fireclan
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m i s c.
sexuality ; Straight
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Also, I don't think you have to put when she dies in the personality, lol. Just put it in a "other" if you want.
Also, fix a bit of the spelling like "preggers".
And in the history, you need some more detail. Someone doesn't bully someone just because they won't fight back, it's not really a good reason???
And I'm pretty sure you forgot Memory and Stamina in the skills.
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I'm remaking the pic so don't lock it yet.
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2. I'd like to see a bit more appearance added.
3. Add some more detail to her personality. Why does she never get into fights? Is she shy or just mature etc?
4. And, like I said before, it doesn't make sense for kits to just bully her if she couldn't fight back. They wouldn't start bullying her out of nowhere at first, they wouldn't know if she fought back anyways when they bullied her the first time. It needs more of an explanation.
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Skybreeze wrote:1. You need to add clan & rank.
2. I'd like to see a bit more appearance added.
3. Add some more detail to her personality. Why does she never get into fights? Is she shy or just mature etc?
4. And, like I said before, it doesn't make sense for kits to just bully her if she couldn't fight back. They wouldn't start bullying her out of nowhere at first, they wouldn't know if she fought back anyways when they bullied her the first time. It needs more of an explanation.
#bump for this
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Skybreeze wrote:1. You need to add clan & rank.
2. I'd like to see a bit more appearance added.
3. Add some more detail to her personality. Why does she never get into fights? Is she shy or just mature etc?
4. And, like I said before, it doesn't make sense for kits to just bully her if she couldn't fight back. They wouldn't start bullying her out of nowhere at first, they wouldn't know if she fought back anyways when they bullied her the first time. It needs more of an explanation.
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A personality flaw is something that makes a cat more realistic. Like maybe she has trust issues, or doesn't think before she speaks
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