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Dewpaw
Fri Oct 06, 2017 1:31 pm
Name: Dewpaw(Dewdapple)
Age: 8 moons
Clan: FireClan
Gender: Female
Was named Dewkit after her blue-gray pelt. Warrior name will be Dewdapple, based on her spots
Appearance: A pretty light blue-gray shecat with gray dapples. With amber eyes and a black nose, her face can show a bit of her true personality. She is lithe and skinny, her legs long and built for running. She has a long, striped tail that helps her balance on trees. Her paws are smaller than they should be.
Personality: Dewpaw is quite the aggressive and short-tempered cat. She knows that she was rejected as a kit, so she constantly is trying to prove herself. She likes to settle things that have to do with other clans with her claws instead of wording things. When Dewpaw isn't being mean, she is talkative. She likes to brag about everything she's done during the day. She hopes to get a mate someday. She still has her curiosity, but has learnt to control it, a little.
Hunting 5/10
Fighting: 7/10
Swimming: 2/10
Climbing: 8/10
Speed: 6/10
Stamina: 5/10
Agility: 4/10
Memory: 7/10
Leaping: 6/10
Herb Knowledge: 2/10
History: As a kit, Dewkit was hated. She wasn't good like her other siblings. She was very curious and wanted to learn everything, getting her into trouble a lot. Her mother saw this as stupidity and labeled her as a troublemaker. Two of the other kits, Lilackit and Mistkit, understood how she felt and became her friends. When she became an apprentice, she was practically ignored by everyone but Lilacpaw, Mistpaw, and her mentor. Recently she decided to show the clan how good she is and is currently striving to be the best.
Relationships:
Mom: Roseberry
Dad: Blackwing
Siblings: Jadepaw and Brackenpaw
hope everything's okay
Age: 8 moons
Clan: FireClan
Gender: Female
Was named Dewkit after her blue-gray pelt. Warrior name will be Dewdapple, based on her spots
Appearance: A pretty light blue-gray shecat with gray dapples. With amber eyes and a black nose, her face can show a bit of her true personality. She is lithe and skinny, her legs long and built for running. She has a long, striped tail that helps her balance on trees. Her paws are smaller than they should be.
Personality: Dewpaw is quite the aggressive and short-tempered cat. She knows that she was rejected as a kit, so she constantly is trying to prove herself. She likes to settle things that have to do with other clans with her claws instead of wording things. When Dewpaw isn't being mean, she is talkative. She likes to brag about everything she's done during the day. She hopes to get a mate someday. She still has her curiosity, but has learnt to control it, a little.
Hunting 5/10
Fighting: 7/10
Swimming: 2/10
Climbing: 8/10
Speed: 6/10
Stamina: 5/10
Agility: 4/10
Memory: 7/10
Leaping: 6/10
Herb Knowledge: 2/10
History: As a kit, Dewkit was hated. She wasn't good like her other siblings. She was very curious and wanted to learn everything, getting her into trouble a lot. Her mother saw this as stupidity and labeled her as a troublemaker. Two of the other kits, Lilackit and Mistkit, understood how she felt and became her friends. When she became an apprentice, she was practically ignored by everyone but Lilacpaw, Mistpaw, and her mentor. Recently she decided to show the clan how good she is and is currently striving to be the best.
Relationships:
Mom: Roseberry
Dad: Blackwing
Siblings: Jadepaw and Brackenpaw
hope everything's okay
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Re: Dewpaw
Sat Oct 07, 2017 6:37 am
This is a really good audition, but I would like to point out a couple things I've noticed. The first thing is that the text is really big, did you enlarge it? Do you think you could make it back to the normal size again?
And the next thing is that you say she is built for running in her appearance. I would think that would move her stamina up a little more? Also, is she still just as curious as before? You mention it in her history, but don't say if it has recently changed or not in her personality.
Again, pretty good first audition. Fix these few things and it'll be ready to accept.
And the next thing is that you say she is built for running in her appearance. I would think that would move her stamina up a little more? Also, is she still just as curious as before? You mention it in her history, but don't say if it has recently changed or not in her personality.
Again, pretty good first audition. Fix these few things and it'll be ready to accept.
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Age : 24
Location : at my computer
Re: Dewpaw
Mon Oct 09, 2017 6:24 am
Accepted! Have fun in the RP.
If you don't have a mentor ready yet, be sure to find one through the chat, or by using this topic: https://warriorclan.forumotion.com/t3477-mentor-topic
If you don't have a mentor ready yet, be sure to find one through the chat, or by using this topic: https://warriorclan.forumotion.com/t3477-mentor-topic
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