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Swiftclaw
Gender: She-Cat
Clan: Brightclan
Rank: Warrior
Appearance: She is a medium-haired cat. She has a light brown coat, Hazel eyes and Sharp claws. She has a sleek body and a Scar on her back-right leg. She is slightly smaller than average for her age.
Personality: Swiftclaw is shy and quiet. She is very loyal and does well with teamwork, although she finds it hard to trust others who are not close to her. She likes climbing trees because it gives her a good view of the surroundings and it acts as a retreat. She also enjoys hunting for her clan. She is not good at fighting because she strongly dislikes it and may even run if she somehow ends up in one. She has a low self-esteem because of this because she thinks of herself as someone who is defective. The one cat who won't fight. She looks up to her brother, even though he is clumsy.
Skills:
Fighting: 2
Hunting: 8
Climbing: 6
Running: 7
Swimming: 4
Strength: 4
Stamina: 6
Memory skills: 6
Dreams: Swiftclaw dreams of being a medicine cat because she gets to help the injured and sick, but won't have to fight anymore.
Family:
Mother: Autumnbark (living)
Father: Snakestrike (living, permanently injured)
Siblings: Brokenfang (Living, brother, @Orion)
History: Swiftclaw was traumatised when she witnessed a fight when she was only a kit. She saw countless cats die, and even got hurt herself, which caused a scar on hir back-right leg. But worst of all, she saw her Dad, Snakestrike fight another cat. He won, but he lost half his leg. Swiftclaw doesn't want to see this sort of pain happen again. From then on, she went from happy and playful to shy and quiet. As she grew older, she decided to find other ways to help the clan like hunting and keeping lookout for other cats in trees. She is now well known for her hunting skills throughout the clan, but also known as the one who hates to fight.
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The first I see is the personality. We like a couple "negative" characteristics, along with the "positive" ones. I see shy, quiet, loyal, and that she dislikes fights. I would add more onto her personality to make her seem more unique, if that makes sense. Both in the positive, and negative way.
Another thing about the personality, is the comment on tree climbing. BrightClan is known for it's moorland, like WindClan. So that would also go for the skills as well. I suggest that if you are making a BrightClan cat, that you lower the climbing skill. It just makes it more realistic, and so that it matches the Clan.
Please write out the appearance in full sentences. Other than those few things, I think it is a very good audition. Please edit, and post telling us when you are done.
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Before I can say anything about the audition, please edit your original topic with the edited information instead of quoting it.
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I think you're audition is looking pretty good. One last thing though, is that you should lower one of your skills. Either hunting, running, or memory. On this site we like it when you have only 2 skills ranging from level 7-10. If you lower one of the 7's it would help.
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