mistystorm of Duskclan

name= Mistystorm
clan= Duskclan
siblings= Lilypaw ( half sibling, and Lilypaw is my cat)
parents. mother= Rvenfur  father= Sandfur
age/gender= she-cat/ 32 moons.
appearance= Mistystorm is a light grey she-cat. Mistystorm is very lean, and not very muscular. Mistystorm has a long tail, regular sized legs, and long claws. Mistystorm has blue eyes, and a pink nose.

past life= Mistystorm had a fine life in duskclan, Ravenfur and Sandfur where nice to her, she was devastated when Sandfur left Duskclan with his new mate, Lilypaws mother, to be a rouge. They had already had Lilypaw , and they left her. Ravenfur had died in a border fight, 3 moons earlier. When Mistystorm was doing her apprentice assessment, she wrenched her shoulder, she can not run as good as before. Not much happened when she was a apprentice, she hopes more things will happen as a warrior.  

personality= Mistystorm is a very shy cat, and she does not have many friends. Mistystorm never talks to anyone. She is always acting awkward and if cats try to talk to her she acts very jumpy and quite. Mistystorm is very thoughtfull, and would be a good cat to go to to solve a problem, if she would talk that is. Mistystorm is constantly feeling like she is not good enough at something, and works to improve it. Mistystorm scarcely talks to anyone other then Lilypaw.

skills
fighting= 8/10
hunting= 7/10
swimming= 1/10
climbing= 2/10
herb memory= 3/10
memory== 8/10
sneak attacks= 6/10
running= 9/10

I'm starting to notice a lot of your cats have the same personality?

err ya, I'm basically putting my personality, but adding some, I should probably change it, but I have made a few that are shy

Well, the thing about making a character is that you can make someone entirely new.

ok, I changed it, I think its different then my other cats.

If Lilypaw is in a different Clan, how can she talk to her?

omg I'm making like so many mistakes.. done.

Could use more history

ok, I added some.

Could you please work on your grammar? It's kind of hard to read.

its doesn't say I miss spelled something right now..

There are a lot of things that should be capitalized and aren't and misused words, it's generally difficult to read.

I checked and lilypaw is in duskclan
also I fixed it.

It's still difficult to read, you might want to look a bit closer.

Fixed I think

Look, you already have a fair amount of cats, so I'm going to start holding you to a standard to help improve your writing. 
You have to use proper grammar and capitalization, every name should be capitalized, not just some of them, and the Clans have the prefix as well as the c capitalized.

ok, I'm sorry, and thank you, some how I have never made a b on a grade card, and yet I'm TERRIBLE at writing.... also I fixed it.

 there are still a few mistake but they're pretty minor