Cedarpaw

Cedarkit~Cedarpaw~Cedarstrike
She-cat ~ 6 moons ~ Fireclan

Cedarpaw is a grey she cat with white paws. She has long fur and a white patch around her blue eyes. Her body is lean and she has long legs


Family:
Flowerbreeze ~ Mother ~ Deceased ~ Died of Greencough
Cloudheart ~ Father ~ Fireclan warrior
Snowpaw ~ Foster Brother ~ Fireclan
Littlelily ~ Foster Brother ~ Fireclan


Cedarpaw is one of those apprentices who strive to be the best. She always trys her hardest. She teases her brother but, in her heart, she loves him dearly. She is a spoilt stubborn she-cat who has an atitude. She is easily angred and wants a mate and kits one day.


Skills: (Out of ten)
Memory: 1 (Memory of a Fruit fly, thanks Daisy for the metaphor)
Speed: 4
Stamina: 8
Strength: 7
Climbing: 6
Swimming: 3
Herb knowledge: 7
Hunting: 5
Fighting: 7

Cedarpaw was born two two beautiful cats in her roleplayers mind, Flowerbreeze and Cloudheart. They would spoil her as much as they could. When Bella and Ice came around, she loved them so much that Flowerbreeze adopted them! She became an apprentice with the mentor Walnutsplash.

First, you need more for the appearance. Second, you forgot the most important skills: hunting and fighting. Third, I don't understand anything in her history. Fourth, you also forgot age, gender, clan, and rank.

Strength counts as them...

2nd HOW AM I ASPOSED TO DESCRIBE A CAT LIKE THAT?

3rd Whoops

you still need to do fighting and hunting..

That better?