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Hailpaw of Fireclan
Tue Mar 14, 2017 7:26 am
W^~*{Hailpaw}*~^W
Tom
10 Moons
Apprentice
Fireclan
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Father~ Dark ~ Dark is dark. ~ Rogue ~
Mother~ Sunshadow ~ Greyish brown and white she-cat.
Sister~ Mistpaw ~ Alive ~ Grey she-cat.~ Apprentice.
Sister~ Niche ~ Alive ~ Light brown and white she-cat? ~ Rogue ~
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Hailpaw is a relatively long legged tom with small, swift paws. His tail is shorter then most and is kinda sharp looking at the tip. His face is round, his muzzle poking out and framing widely made eyes. Most of the toms underside is completely white, dapples are seen on his remaining grey parts too. The grey fades as it approaches his back. Spots of darker colours are seen on their body. His ears are black. His eyes are green, his nose pale and cream.
Hailpaw is a seeming ball of anger when he isn't his carefree self. The side of anger is shown often, especially with certain cats( Mostly cats that take interest in his sister or that he holds feelings for.). He promises to take care of his sister through thick and thin, and why not a fan of clan life will stay for her benefit. He is quite clumsy and falls often which also sparks his rage.
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Fighting~4, Hunting~7, Swimming~2, Climbing~2, Strength~1, Stamina~ 5, Memory~4, Running(Speed/Agility)~8
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Hailkit was born with his two siblings, Niche, other name at time and Mistkit. Sunshadow was there mother. Niche was originally named Lilackit, but joined her father to be a rogue once he convinced her. Their father, Dark, used to sneak them all out of camp and show them his den, territory, and how amazing rogue life was. Hailpaw and Mistpaw wished to stay with their mother, but Niche left to join him.Hailpaw was distraught and if it wasn't for his family in the clan, his mother who he cared for deeply and his sister who he was protective over. He would've went with his sister to make sure she was safe but he thought it was horrible to leave your clan. He holds anger for deserting him and claims she was a disgrace to him and his family, only referring to the clan side.
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Hailpaw generally dislikes rogues strongly after his sister left the clan to be one.
He likes the smell of his favourite prey, Rabbit.
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Re: Hailpaw of Fireclan
Thu Mar 16, 2017 11:20 pm
Hello, Weasel! Looking good, but a few things need to be added/fixed.
' You are required to show what rank Hailpaw has, in your audition.
' You need to add running to you skills (unless speed/agility is in place of that)
' The history is a bit confusing when read. Maybe you need to state who you are talking about. Where did Sunshadow come from in the history? It has no explanation. Who is expecting the kits? You should add more history about Hailpaw, because this audition is about him as well. Otherwise, there is nothing else needed.
' You are required to show what rank Hailpaw has, in your audition.
' You need to add running to you skills (unless speed/agility is in place of that)
' The history is a bit confusing when read. Maybe you need to state who you are talking about. Where did Sunshadow come from in the history? It has no explanation. Who is expecting the kits? You should add more history about Hailpaw, because this audition is about him as well. Otherwise, there is nothing else needed.
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