Cats audition

Name:Flamefang
Age:20 moons
Gender:Tom
Rank:Warrior
Clan:Fireclan

Appearance:Ginger with a dak ginger stripes and white belly

Personality:Loyal,Kind,loving

Skills: (out of 10)
Fighting -7/10
Hunting - 10/10
Climbing - 5/10
Running - 4/10
Swimming - 2/10
Strength - 8/10
Memory skills - 6/10

Family:
Mother - Willowpetal (deceased)
Father - Bramblewhisker
Littermates/siblings - 

History:He is the only son.His mother died when he 2 moons old.Then he taken care by his foster mother,redclaw. He was a loyal friends and pronise that he will fight and hint for his clan.

Hi there Flamefang, I'm Willow, the head admin around here, and I'm posting to give you some audition tips

So here at WarriorClan we like to give our cats as much depth as possible with their auditions so that we can make them seem super realistic when we roleplay with them! This is an awesome first attempt, but I don't really get the full idea of your character.

(To edit your audition, click the button that says 'edit' at the top of your original post)

Try adding a little more of their appearance; are they tall? Fat? Skinny? Big ears? Long tail? Any scars?
Personality we like to have in full sentences, such as "Flamefang is loyal and kind, with a loving personality that nobody can resist." We also like to make sure our characters have good and bad traits; maybe he's kind, but he's too focussed on how everyone views him that it makes him very nervous when he has to stand up for himself or anyone else.
With the skills, we only let 2 be above 7/10 because otherwise the cat is too powerful, and we normally can't let those skills both be hunting and fighting. For a good idea about it, 0-3 points is not good, 4-6 points is average/normal, and 7-10 is outstandingly good.
His history could also do with a little bit more detail. Why did his mother die? How did his parents meet? Did his foster mother have kits of her own? And you can link it to his personality, for instance, if Redclaw had older kits, then he could have been bullied by them, which made him shy.

Again, this is an awesome first audition! I hope you like the site

Bump please @Flamefang

We as admins and moderators 'bump' an audition every three days to alert the owner that their audition needs to be fixed or completed.

#secondbump @Flamefang

#thirdbump @Flamefang