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Lunar Moon Wip
Sun Mar 12, 2017 7:58 pm
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b a s i c s
name ; Lunar Moon
Nickname(s) ; Lunar
b a s i c s
name ; Lunar Moon
Nickname(s) ; Lunar
age ; 29 Moons
gender ; She
clan ; Rogue Of Lunar Moon's Group
rank ; Rogue Leader
clan ; Rogue Of Lunar Moon's Group
rank ; Rogue Leader
description ; Lunar has short, White fur. She has black spots covering some of her fur, mostly on her face. She has murky Swamp like eyes. She is tall and skinny, with long whiskers.
skills ; out of ten
Fighting - 6
Hunting - 4
Climbing - 5
Running - 10
Swimming - 1
Strength - 8
Memory skills - 2
Stamina - 5
skills ; out of ten
Fighting - 6
Hunting - 4
Climbing - 5
Running - 10
Swimming - 1
Strength - 8
Memory skills - 2
Stamina - 5
Herb Lore - 0
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b e h i n d t h e c a t
personality ; Lunar Moon is a hostile cat. She doesn't like other cats joining her group. But, she is very loyal to the group and will see when the time is right to get more cats. She is Evil, able to kill cats who don't listen to her orders. She is known to at times regret her choices, but others tell her it was the right thing to do.
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b e h i n d t h e c a t
personality ; Lunar Moon is a hostile cat. She doesn't like other cats joining her group. But, she is very loyal to the group and will see when the time is right to get more cats. She is Evil, able to kill cats who don't listen to her orders. She is known to at times regret her choices, but others tell her it was the right thing to do.
history ; Lunar was born too two kittypets called blush and night, And had a sister called lepti. She hated the twolegs and the kittypets so she left. She knew about the clan cats because of a kittypet friend, Who was in waterclan. So she asked where waterclan was and that friend took her there. She asked if she could join the waterclan cats but sandstar shut her down because he didn't want someone who was friends with a exiled cat.After walking for a bit she found a rouge called storm near the old twoleg place and they fell in love. After 3 Moons together they decided to make a rouge group. She was expecting kits and Lunar decided she didn't want the kits. So when they were born she killed them, although she decided to keep one. After awhile Lunar thought that Storm was to kind and she met a cat called Luke while hunting. She fell in love and Pretends that she loves storm.
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r o m a n t i c s
crush ; Luke {Kittypet,Open}
mate ; Storm {Rogue,Open}
kits ; 3 Unnamed kits {Dead, Killed by Lunar} Echo {Alive,Rouge}
kin ;
crush ; Luke {Kittypet,Open}
mate ; Storm {Rogue,Open}
kits ; 3 Unnamed kits {Dead, Killed by Lunar} Echo {Alive,Rouge}
kin ;
Mother : Blush {Dead,Killed By Lepti}
Father : Pingo Night {Kittypet,Alive}
Littermates : Lepti {Dead, Killed by bader}
Misc//Others
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m i s c.
sexuality ; Straight
Favourite Prey ; Hare
Favourite Season ; Leaf-Bare
Favourite scent ; Blood
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m i s c.
sexuality ; Straight
Favourite Prey ; Hare
Favourite Season ; Leaf-Bare
Favourite scent ; Blood
LeopardspotsForum Storyteller
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Re: Lunar Moon Wip
Sun Mar 12, 2017 8:03 pm
why are you using a picture of an aging cat for her if she's like, 2 years old???
WillowstormHead Admin/Creator
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Re: Lunar Moon Wip
Sun Mar 12, 2017 8:04 pm
Pain is also not a scent
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Re: Lunar Moon Wip
Sun Mar 12, 2017 8:05 pm
@Leo Because It fits her look.
@Willow Fixed
@Willow Fixed
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Re: Lunar Moon Wip
Sun Mar 12, 2017 8:08 pm
Envy is also not a scent.
- LeopardspotsForum Storyteller
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Re: Lunar Moon Wip
Sun Mar 12, 2017 8:09 pm
why didn't you just use a tortoiseshell turkish angora? the picture you used is a condition older cats have (older as in like 19 years old) that is the equivalent of old men getting liverspots
(tortoiseshell turkish angora)
(tortoiseshell turkish angora)
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Re: Lunar Moon Wip
Sun Mar 12, 2017 8:11 pm
@Leo Its just a image it doesnt really matter
@Willow Fixed
@Willow Fixed
- WillowstormHead Admin/Creator
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Re: Lunar Moon Wip
Sun Mar 12, 2017 8:12 pm
It does matter, actually. And rogues is a broad scent, why don't you just put "food" or something?
- LeopardspotsForum Storyteller
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Re: Lunar Moon Wip
Sun Mar 12, 2017 8:15 pm
If you're formatting your audition like this, these things do matter sushi. she doesn't even have a written appearance. You labelled a 90 year old with liverspots as a young adult.
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Re: Lunar Moon Wip
Sun Mar 12, 2017 8:20 pm
Fixed
AquastarAudition Instructor
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Re: Lunar Moon Wip
Sun Mar 12, 2017 9:00 pm
Theres already a rogue with this name so you must change it
- WillowstormHead Admin/Creator
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Re: Lunar Moon Wip
Sun Mar 12, 2017 9:01 pm
Also it's spelt rogue.
- WillowstormHead Admin/Creator
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Re: Lunar Moon Wip
Sun Mar 12, 2017 9:33 pm
And there's already a rogue called Solar
- SushiWonderful Supporter
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Re: Lunar Moon Wip
Sun Mar 12, 2017 9:57 pm
fixed c:
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Re: Lunar Moon Wip
Sun Mar 12, 2017 10:43 pm
Finished~
DaisyleapForum Overseer- Posts : 6537
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Re: Lunar Moon Wip
Mon Mar 13, 2017 5:19 am
The history barely even applies to her family?
First some grammar corrections because I'm like that: "to" and "he".
Second, please go more in depth with the ending of her history. Who is Luke, and why does she consider loving him instead of Storm? Most importantly, why did she kill her kits?
First some grammar corrections because I'm like that: "to" and "he".
Second, please go more in depth with the ending of her history. Who is Luke, and why does she consider loving him instead of Storm? Most importantly, why did she kill her kits?
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Re: Lunar Moon Wip
Mon Mar 13, 2017 5:25 am
Fixed
- DaisyleapForum Overseer
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Re: Lunar Moon Wip
Mon Mar 13, 2017 5:28 am
How would a newborn get away from her mother? If anything, it would be trying to come closer for milk.
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Re: Lunar Moon Wip
Mon Mar 13, 2017 5:29 am
Fixed
- DaisyleapForum Overseer
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Re: Lunar Moon Wip
Mon Mar 13, 2017 5:32 am
Her personality is very one-sided, to say the least. You really only focus on one trait of hers; hostility.
- SushiWonderful Supporter
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Re: Lunar Moon Wip
Mon Mar 13, 2017 5:43 am
fixed?
- DaisyleapForum Overseer
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Re: Lunar Moon Wip
Thu Mar 16, 2017 12:40 pm
As Willow said, rogues is pretty un-specific in terms of scent.
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Re: Lunar Moon Wip
Fri Mar 17, 2017 9:28 pm
fixed
- DaisyleapForum Overseer
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Re: Lunar Moon Wip
Mon Mar 27, 2017 4:57 am
The history doesn't mention Lunar killing her mother, Blush, either.
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Re: Lunar Moon Wip
Mon Mar 27, 2017 6:09 pm
Fixed
- WillowstormHead Admin/Creator
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Re: Lunar Moon Wip
Mon Mar 27, 2017 6:11 pm
Who is Lepti? And Sandstar is a boy.
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Re: Lunar Moon Wip
Mon Mar 27, 2017 6:16 pm
~Fixed~
QuakeAudition Instructor- Posts : 6480
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Re: Lunar Moon Wip
Sun Apr 09, 2017 7:04 am
It doesn't say anything about her killing her mother in history?
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Re: Lunar Moon Wip
Sun Apr 09, 2017 1:49 pm
She.. didn't kill her mother..
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Re: Lunar Moon Wip
Sun Apr 09, 2017 7:36 pm
oh right sorry, I misread the name x.x
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