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Oakpaw + Firepaw
Thu Apr 13, 2017 9:54 pm
Ignore that it says willowpaw haha
"Im So Young Yet So Unlucky"
B A S I C S 10 Moons - She - Waterclan - Apprentice
oakpaw is a brown she-cat with green eyes. She has a lighter patch on her chest. Her legs are crippled due to a monster insensident. She is tall, but this is never seen due to her not being able to get up. She is a normal weight.
D I G G I N G D E E P E R
Oakpaw is a enthuesastic cat. She hates watching cats fight, and thinks everyone should be friends. Oakpaw is shy due to other clan cats stating she shouldnt be a warrior. She likes to bird watch, it makes her feel happy and forget about her legs. She enjoys talking to the medicine cats, as they always say that she is getting better, even if She isn't. She Hates when firepaw says she "should be a medicne cat", because she wants to be a warrior, and will fight with him, and this happens alot.
D I G G I N G D E E P E R Oakpaw is a enthuesastic cat. She hates watching cats fight, and thinks everyone should be friends. Oakpaw is shy due to other clan cats stating she shouldnt be a warrior. She likes to bird watch, it makes her feel happy and forget about her legs. She enjoys talking to the medicine cats, as they always say that she is getting better, even if She isn't. She Hates when firepaw says she "should be a medicne cat", because she wants to be a warrior, and will fight with him, and this happens alot.
Oakkit was born to amberheart, a ginger tabby and stormflame, a brown cat both of brightclan. When amberheart died, stormflame deiced that brightclan was "cursed" and they should leave, but stormflame said they should wait 6 Moons. When they were at a thunderpath, oakpaw was walking along and stormflame had already walked through with flamepaw. A monster soar towards Oakpaw and she doged barely, only it hit her legs, making them useless. Oakpaw struggled to waterclan as stormflame had a friend (Angelmoss) there. Oakpaw would spend almost all her time in the med. cat den. Then they became apprentices. Oakpaw said that she was strong enough to train, and they became apprentices. Nothing has happened since
T H E C O R E
Mother - Amberheart (Dead,killed at kitting)
Father - Stormflame (alive, adoptable)
Sister(s) - Hollykit (Dead, born stillborn
Brother(s) - Firepaw (Alive, @Sushi)
Step-Sister(s) - Ibiskit (Alive, Adoptable)
Step-Brother(s) - Abysskit (Alive, Adoptable
Step-Mother - Angelmoss (Alive, Adoptable)
fighting - 5, She is a okay fighter.
hunting - 6, She is a okay hunter.
climbing - 4, She is a really bad hunter
running - 8, She is a really good runner
swimming - 1, She hates to swim.
strength - 7, She is pretty strong
stamina - 6, She is okay at this
memory skills - 4, She can hardly remeber anything
Herb Lore - 8, She knows alot from her time in the medicne den.
"Can we go outside now?"
Firekit - Firepaw - Firepoppy
B A S I C S 7 Moons 7 moon old - Tom - Waterclan - Apprentice
Firepaw is a light ginger tabby with blue eyes. He is a runt, making him very small. He is a normal weight for his size.
D I G G I N G D E E P E R
Flamepaw is a caring tom, He loves watching his sister get better at walking and his step-siblings fighting over who would be the best leader. He acts like a kit at times and sometimes even plays with his step-siblings, he is always the leader because ibiskit says you need to be older to be a leader, and firepaw is the oldest. He likes to bird-watch with his sister when he isnt playing with the kits. At Gatherings, he always interups, yet he listens carefully to the leaders. One day, he wants to be the leader of waterclan
T H E C O R E
Her family is the same as oakpaws
fighting - 9
hunting - 5
climbing - 4
running - 4
swimming - 6
strength - 8
stamina - 6
memory skills - 2
Herb Lore - 1
T H E C O R E Mother - Amberheart (Dead,killed at kitting)
Father - Stormflame (alive, adoptable)
Sister(s) - Hollykit (Dead, born stillborn
Brother(s) - Firepaw (Alive, @Sushi)
Step-Sister(s) - Ibiskit (Alive, Adoptable)
Step-Brother(s) - Abysskit (Alive, Adoptable
Step-Mother - Angelmoss (Alive, Adoptable)
fighting - 5, She is a okay fighter.
hunting - 6, She is a okay hunter.
climbing - 4, She is a really bad hunter
running - 8, She is a really good runner
swimming - 1, She hates to swim.
strength - 7, She is pretty strong
stamina - 6, She is okay at this
memory skills - 4, She can hardly remeber anything
Herb Lore - 8, She knows alot from her time in the medicne den.
"Can we go outside now?"
B A S I C S 7 Moons 7 moon old - Tom - Waterclan - ApprenticeFirepaw is a light ginger tabby with blue eyes. He is a runt, making him very small. He is a normal weight for his size.
D I G G I N G D E E P E R Flamepaw is a caring tom, He loves watching his sister get better at walking and his step-siblings fighting over who would be the best leader. He acts like a kit at times and sometimes even plays with his step-siblings, he is always the leader because ibiskit says you need to be older to be a leader, and firepaw is the oldest. He likes to bird-watch with his sister when he isnt playing with the kits. At Gatherings, he always interups, yet he listens carefully to the leaders. One day, he wants to be the leader of waterclan
History//ignore the willowkit(paw) wrote:Oakkit was born to amberheart, a ginger tabby and stormflame, a brown cat both of brightclan. When amberheart died, stormflame deiced that brightclan was "cursed" and they should leave, but stormflame said they should wait 6 Moons. When they were at a thunderpath, oakpaw was walking along and stormflame had already walked through with flamepaw. A monster soar towards Oakpaw and she doged barely, only it hit her legs, making them useless. Oakpaw struggled to waterclan as stormflame had a friend (Angelmoss) there. Oakpaw would spend almost all her time in the med. cat den. Then they became apprentices. Oakpaw said that she was strong enough to train, and they became apprentices. Nothing has happened since
T H E C O R E Her family is the same as oakpaws
fighting - 9
hunting - 5
climbing - 4
running - 4
swimming - 6
strength - 8
stamina - 6
memory skills - 2
Herb Lore - 1
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Re: Oakpaw + Firepaw
Thu Apr 13, 2017 9:58 pm
(We have too many Frost cats please change to DuskClan or BrightClan)
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Re: Oakpaw + Firepaw
Thu Apr 13, 2017 10:02 pm
Fixed
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Re: Oakpaw + Firepaw
Fri Apr 14, 2017 11:27 pm
Finished
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Re: Oakpaw + Firepaw
Sat Apr 15, 2017 2:19 am
Oakpaw needs a bit more personality details and Firepaw history shouldn't be the exact same as Oakpaw's since she doesn't have crippled legs.
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Re: Oakpaw + Firepaw
Sat Apr 15, 2017 1:00 pm
*Firepaws.Aquastar626. wrote:Oakpaw needs a bit more personality details and Firepaw history shouldn't be the exact same as Oakpaw's since she doesn't have crippled legs.
It tells the same story though?
*Oakpaw
Fixing
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Re: Oakpaw + Firepaw
Sat Apr 15, 2017 2:32 pm
Firepaw's history should show their reaction to Oakpaw's injury
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Re: Oakpaw + Firepaw
Sat Apr 15, 2017 2:39 pm
Fixed
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Re: Oakpaw + Firepaw
Mon Apr 24, 2017 6:52 am
Oakpaw-
*Needs some negative personality traits
*If she lost ability of her hind legs, she wouldn't be able to run, period. So how is she a good runner?
*Fix grammar in all areas. Some sentences I couldn't read.
*If she was hit by a monster as a kit, she would have most likely died. Maybe you should change that to more recently as a young apprentice.
Firepaw-
*In his history names are mixed up (for Firepaw it says Flamepaw and for Oakpaw it says Willowpaw)
*Again, grammar needs fixing in all areas
*Needs some negative personality traits
*If she lost ability of her hind legs, she wouldn't be able to run, period. So how is she a good runner?
*Fix grammar in all areas. Some sentences I couldn't read.
*If she was hit by a monster as a kit, she would have most likely died. Maybe you should change that to more recently as a young apprentice.
Firepaw-
*In his history names are mixed up (for Firepaw it says Flamepaw and for Oakpaw it says Willowpaw)
*Again, grammar needs fixing in all areas
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Re: Oakpaw + Firepaw
Tue Apr 25, 2017 3:06 pm
1. FixingPanther wrote:Oakpaw-
*Needs some negative personality traits
*If she lost ability of her hind legs, she wouldn't be able to run, period. So how is she a good runner?
*Fix grammar in all areas. Some sentences I couldn't read.
*If she was hit by a monster as a kit, she would have most likely died. Maybe you should change that to more recently as a young apprentice.
Firepaw-
*In his history names are mixed up (for Firepaw it says Flamepaw and for Oakpaw it says Willowpaw)
*Again, grammar needs fixing in all areas
2. She trained as a kit
3. Fixing
4. Met Briarlight
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1. Said "Ignore that it says willowpaw"
2. fixing
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Re: Oakpaw + Firepaw
Tue Apr 25, 2017 4:35 pm
If you've seen cats with paralyzed hind legs in real life, they are on wheels, so not even human technology could allow a paralyzed cat to run. Also you said she is unable to stand up?
What do you mean by "Met Briarlight"?
What do you mean by "Met Briarlight"?
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Re: Oakpaw + Firepaw
Wed Apr 26, 2017 6:28 am
In the books, Briarlight would have died if it was realistic. There's a 99.9% chance of it and Briarlight was lucky. It probably isn't aloud here.
Can you just change the name Willowpaw to her actual name?
Can you just change the name Willowpaw to her actual name?
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Re: Oakpaw + Firepaw
Wed Apr 26, 2017 7:24 pm
1. I'll Ask WillowQuake wrote:In the books, Briarlight would have died if it was realistic. There's a 99.9% chance of it and Briarlight was lucky. It probably isn't aloud here.
Can you just change the name Willowpaw to her actual name?
2. Fixed
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Re: Oakpaw + Firepaw
Wed Apr 26, 2017 9:08 pm
Not allowed.
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Re: Oakpaw + Firepaw
Wed Apr 26, 2017 9:11 pm
Fixed
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Re: Oakpaw + Firepaw
Wed Apr 26, 2017 9:13 pm
Uh...no it isn't.
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Re: Oakpaw + Firepaw
Wed Apr 26, 2017 9:14 pm
i fixed it?panther wrote:f she was hit by a monster as a kit, she would have most likely died. Maybe you should change that to more recently as a young apprentice.
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Re: Oakpaw + Firepaw
Wed Apr 26, 2017 9:14 pm
She can't be crippled, her appearance and personality are still focussed around it. Just changing her history isn't good enough, you should know this by now.
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Re: Oakpaw + Firepaw
Wed Apr 26, 2017 9:17 pm
Its happened twice, cinderpelt and brairlight
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Re: Oakpaw + Firepaw
Wed Apr 26, 2017 9:19 pm
Yes, but there are not really any thunderpaths around for her to get crippled on, like Cinderpelt, and if there was a storm like Briarlight's injury she would have died. Briarlight was simply very very lucky.
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Re: Oakpaw + Firepaw
Wed Apr 26, 2017 9:29 pm
where would there be a thunderpath then? (it says no-where that there is one)
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Re: Oakpaw + Firepaw
Thu Apr 27, 2017 3:00 am
There aren't any anymore.
Also, Cinderpelt just broke her leg which can happen every so often. Briarlight did not break her legs, she broke her spine and got paralized.
Also, Cinderpelt just broke her leg which can happen every so often. Briarlight did not break her legs, she broke her spine and got paralized.
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Re: Oakpaw + Firepaw
Thu Apr 27, 2017 7:46 pm
hoow tf do cars get around in the newtwoleg place then quake xD
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Re: Oakpaw + Firepaw
Thu Apr 27, 2017 8:06 pm
If she was hit in either of the Twolegplaces, she would have died. No exceptions.
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Re: Oakpaw + Firepaw
Thu Apr 27, 2017 8:10 pm
BURIAL GROUNDS
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Re: Oakpaw + Firepaw
Thu Apr 27, 2017 8:13 pm
You're giving up rather than fixing it?
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Re: Oakpaw + Firepaw
Thu Apr 27, 2017 8:24 pm
yep
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