- Poppyseed
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Shallowkit (Of Fire Clan) (apprentice/future warrior)
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Re: Shallowkit (Of Fire Clan) (apprentice/future warrior)
So, we like detail on this site, and it looks like both the appearance and personality is pretty short. For the appearance, think of more than just fur color and eyes. You can get a picture if that helps, or look to accepted auditions for ideas. But think of fur length, how big or small the character is, whisker length... things like that. And for personality, please write it out in full sentences. We like both good traits, and bad for each character to make them seem less "perfect".
And last thing I'm going to point out right now, is that you should write every name without a space. It is Shallowkit, not Shallow kit. If you have any questions, be sure to ask.
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Re: Shallowkit (Of Fire Clan) (apprentice/future warrior)
Also, the personality is still short. Please look to other auditions for ideas if you need it! And the appearance could be given length by using multiple sentences. Also, please add the apprentice and warrior name onto the audition, like I have asked before.
Please try to fix all of these before telling me you are finished editing.
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Re: Shallowkit (Of Fire Clan) (apprentice/future warrior)
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