Moonkits audition:

Name: Moonriver
Age: 5 moons
Gender: male
Rank: warrior
Clan: DuskClan

Appearance: pitch black fur with ice blue eyes

Personality: snappy, stubborn, protective

Skills: (out of 10)
Fighting - 9
Hunting - 7
Climbing - 8
Running - 7
Swimming - 4
Strength - 6
Stamina -6
Memory skills - 8

Family:
Mother - Lilypaw - deceased
Father - ashpelt - deceased
Littermates/siblings - none

Hi, Vinta, welcome to the site. Here are a few things that need fixing within the audition:
-He can't be a warrior at *five* moons. Change it to fifteen or something but if he's five moons he will need to be an actual kit.
-His mother can't be Lilypaw. Apprentices don't have kits.
-Hunting and fighting can't both be above 6. Lower one of them to either six or smaller.
-When writing out the personality, we like sentences, not just a few words. For example you could say, Moonkit is a protective tom with a stubborn streak and the tendency to snap at those around him. But you will need to add more depth to him.
-Just like with the personality, the appearance needs to be long. Try something like, Moonkit is a sturdy black tom with long limbs built for the moors of DuskClan, and bright, icy blue eyes. Try to add what type of build he has as well. Is he muscular, lean?
-He needs a history. Tell about how his parents met and what lead up to his birth, and if he is a warrior, tell about things that happened early in his life. For example, the death of his parents. How'd they die? How did he react?
-Going back to the skills, a lot of them are really high. Try lowering a few because only two can be 7 and above.
-And finally, there's already a Moonpaw in DuskClan, and to eliminate confusion we don't allow kits and apprentices to have the same prefix. If he is a kit, you will need to change it from Moon to something else. As a warrior, the prefix can remain.