- Ravenwing
- Posts : 26
Age : 19
Ravenwing //DuskClan// (Done)
Age: 20 moons
Gender: tom
Rank: Warrior
Appearance:
Ravenwing has a small but lithe build. His fur is pure black, which can make him almost invisible in the dark night. He has shining bright blue shaded eyes, and his claws are long and sharp. He has a long fluffy tail and small paws. His legs are short and he has a menacing put elegant walk to him.
Personality:
Ravenwing is a stubborn cat who would always second guess others. He is observant of his surroundings and others around him. He is loyal and would do anything for his clan. But he is insecure about his size and strength, which makes him anxious and jitty. He makes up for it though with his clever wit and fast thinking.
Skills: (out of 10)
Fighting - 5/10
Hunting - 4/10
Climbing - 3/10
Running - 6/10
Swimming - 1/10
Strength - 7/10
Memory skills - 3/10
Family:
Mother - Fallenleaf, deceased
Father - Hailstorm, deceased
Littermates/siblings - None
History:
- DavewingForum Veteran
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Location : at my computer
Re: Ravenwing //DuskClan// (Done)
The first I see is that the memory skill is pretty low. You don't see many characters with it that low, and I suggest that you raise it. Especially if you describe him as observant, fast-thinking, and clever. To me at least, this skill would go along with those traits.
Another small thing is that I'd like more explanation on how the father died. You say that it was from an accident, but that doesn't give much information.
Other than those two things, I think it looks good. Please post here once you've finished editing and someone will look it over again.
- Ravenwing
- Posts : 26
Age : 19
Re: Ravenwing //DuskClan// (Done)
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Re: Ravenwing //DuskClan// (Done)
- DavewingForum Veteran
- Posts : 17943
Age : 24
Location : at my computer
Re: Ravenwing //DuskClan// (Done)
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